Date: 2014-07-28 01:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dmousey.livejournal.com
Thank you for letting us into your world!

A few persnikity things, third paragraph, I think your missing a 'from' or 'in' after Chekhov's gun.

The paragraph where you're talking about hero changing to villian, you need to change when to went.

Other than that I appreciate this greatly! :)
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